Wednesday, January 21, 2015

Exam Notes

What purpose does writing serve? (V.s. film and audio)
Writing is very different from film and audio, and can convey many different things that those mediums cannot. Because of different points of view that can be presented while writing, more empathy can be stimulated in the reader. They can experience things that they might never experience through the eyes of someone else. While film may create a similar effect, it is not as good as writing because in writing you also have access to all of the thoughts of a character, as opposed to simply being a witness of certain events. 
Also:
  • Imagination
  • Vocabulary
  • Allows for more description
  • Quality time
  • Books leave more up to interpretation
  • No right or wrong answer
  • Larger stories
  • You experience it (emotional investment)
  • Spread of ideas
  • Your writing improves
  • It’s a sum of experiences
  • Unlimited by special effects or depth of reality
  • Film is a new medium, while writing has much more history
  • Watching is passive, reading is active
  • Gathering experience

Why do humans write things down?
  • Initially, to remember things better
  • Our only form of immortality
  • To continue social evolution
  • To express things you are too afraid to say.
  • Teaches empathy
  • Personal emotional outlet

Is writing a narcissistic act?
  • Intend to entertain self and others
  • Want to be remembered
  • Is narcissism really bad?

Why is fiction more useful that hard facts?
  • Can’t relate to numbers
  • No personal context
  • We are in denial about the world
  • Satire


Exam

  • Opinion question
  • Build on article in relation to self
  • Standard essay response
  • 1000 words

Writing like C.S. Lewis with Notes

Once there was a girl named Emily, whose Mother loved to go to garden parties. Now, the majority of these parties were very dull, and Emily never enjoyed them very much. However, this particular party ended up being quite interesting, and so this is where I’m going to begin her story.
It was a surprisingly sunny day for England, and Emily would have much preferred to have spent it playing outside in her own garden, running amuck around the trees, pretending to be a princess or a warrior in some far away kingdom, or generally acting in a way that would be considered improper.
“Now darling,” Mother said. “Do not get your dress dirty, and remember to behave yourself while the adults are talking.”
Emily said nothing, because she was very cross to have her day wasted by a boring garden party.
They walked together through the back gate of some rich woman’s city house and into a small but lush garden. It was very beautiful, with roses blooming in all different colours, and lavender filling the air with heavy, sleepy scents. Tables had been laid out with little finger sandwiches and pots of tea for the adults to enjoy. Many of them were already milling around wearing pale shades that matched the blossoms that surrounded them, picking at the delicious food and making polite conversation. Even the sleepy willow tree in one corner that stood in front of an ivy-covered wall seemed to blossom with colour. It would be a very lovely place to spend an afternoon, Emily thought, if she had been allowed to do as she pleased there.
It was not long before a woman came up to Emily’s Mother, with a small boy in tow. The adults greeted each other with gentle hugs and meaningless pleasantries, while the children looked each other over cautiously. They could both tell that, as the only two youngsters at the party, they were going to be lumped together and expected to entertain each other for multiple hours.
“Emily, this is Hubert,” Emily’s Mother said. “You can play with him while Mummy chats with the adults, all right?”
Emily nodded quietly, knowing fully well what was expected of her at these sort of events.

The two children were given directions to the kid’s table, where juices and cookies would be waiting for them, and left to their own devices. They began walking in silence towards the back of the garden, sullenly accepting their fate to be either bored or in trouble for the rest of the afternoon.

For my performance task I chose the author C.S. Lewis, because I really admire the way in which he can tell a story in simplistic yet elegant terms. Reading through his The Chronicles of Narnia series, I tried to take notice of some particular stylistic things he did and apply them into my own short story. First off, I noticed that he writes in a very novice fashion, over-explaining and “telling” many things, breaking the fourth wall, and using many run-on sentences. While in some works this might make the writing unbearable to read, for C.S. Lewis it simply adds idyllic charm, and completes his fairy-tale air. He also has a tendency to only tell his exposition through addressing the audience directly or by having another character tell the others exposition through stories. Again,  while these methods may be seen as amateur, he makes them work in a fun and smooth-flowing way. As for actual content, he prefers to use children and talking animals as the protagonists,  imbedding christian symbolism in the stories, and having intricate fantasy settings he describes in heavy detail. The end product is a potent fairy tale that will be remembered through one’s entire lifetime. 

I started the story off with a very classic “Once there was…”. C.S. Lewis does this classic fairytale start with almost every single one of his books:

“This is a story about something that happened long ago when your grandfather was a child.” -The Magician’s Nephew
“Once there were four children whose names were Peter, Susan, Edmund and Lucy”
- The Lion, the Witch and the Wardrobe
“This is the story of an adventure that happened in Narnia and Calormen…”
- The Horse and His Boy
“Once there were four children whose names were Peter, Susan, Edmund and Lucy, and it has been told in another book…”
-Prince Caspian
“There was a boy called Eustace Clarence, and he almost deserved it.”
- The Voyage of the Dawn Treader
While these beginnings may seem to some to be almost immature and simplistic, I think it is very near the perfect way to start a story. It throws the reader right in, with no lollygagging or confusion about the topic idea or characters that are about to be portrayed.

Here, I address the reader directly and specifically state that this is a story. C.S. Lewis also did this multiple times throughout his books:

“I hope you all won’t lose interest in Jill for the rest of the book…”
- The Silver Chair
“I hope no one who reads this book has been quite as miserable as Susan and Lucy were that night…” -The Lion, the Witch, and the Wardrobe
I found this very interesting, because while you may think statements like these would alienate the reader they always served to make me feel closer to the story and its protagonists. 


Here I address Emily’s mother as simply Mother. I have capitalized it because it will be her official name for the story. C.S.Lewis does not place very much importance on adults, especially in his earlier books; all his protagonists are under twenty, and the majority are under twelve. The mother in this story mainly serves as a vessel to get Emily to the garden party, where I would have the real plot take place.

This sentence here is very telling, and even uses “because” as a conjunction. However, C.S. Lewis frequently used sentences like this while explaining the emotions and reasons for the actions of the characters.
“Because the game of hide and seek was still going on, it took Edmund and Lucy quite some time to find the others.” -The Lion, the Witch, and the Wardrobe
I think that while this may be an immature way of writing, it is very “of the style” of C.S. Lewis, and makes my writing look and sound more like his.

Throughout his books, C.S. Lewis describes many different fantasy settings. I noticed that he usually describes these in full and intricate detail, leaving almost nothing to the imagination and painting a full picture the reader can easily see in their head. For example, here is how he described an abandoned treasure room:
“For now all knew that it was indeed the ancient treasure chamber of Cair Paraval where they had once reigned as kings and queens of Narnia. There was a kind of path up the middle (as in might be in a greenhouse), and along each side at intervals stood rich suits of armour, like knights guarding the treasures. In between the suits of armour, and on each side of the path,were shelves covered in precious things - necklaces and arm rings and finger rings and golden bowls and dishes and long tusks of ivory, brooches and coronets and chains of gold, and heaps of unset stones lying piled anyhow as if they were marbles or potatoes - diamonds, rubies, carbuncles, emeralds, topazes, and amethysts. Under the shelves stood great chests of oak strengthened with iron bars and heavily padlocked. And it was bitterly cold, and so still that they could hear themselves breathing, and the treasures were so covered in dust that unless they had realized where they were and remembered most of the things, they would have hardly have known they were treasures. There was something sad and a little frightening about the place, because it all seemed so forsaken and long ago. That was why nobody said anything for at least a minute.”
-Prince Caspian
As you can see, his style was very detailed and expressive, and I tried to transfer those factors into my own writing. However, he also has a tendency to let his sentences run on a bit, using multiple commas within one and not ending it until he has communicated multiple points. I didn’t think this factor seemed very professional or add charm,  and so I decided to leave it out.

Frequently C.S. Lewis shows that he has access to multiple character’s thoughts, and refers many times to the Penvensie children as a group with group thoughts. For example:
“They were all wondering what to do next, when Lucy said…”
-The Lion, the Witch and the Wardrobe.
“…Everyone was feeling that the holidays were really over and everyone felt their term-time feelings begin again…” -Prince Caspian

I liked the way this gave the groups of people a sense of cohesiveness, and showed the reader the feelings an environment gave off. I tried to incorporate this in these two paragraphs by showing two different groups and their collective actions and thoughts.

Monday, January 5, 2015

Analyzing Popular Media with LOCK

Song of the Lioness series by Tamara Pierce
Lead 
- Lead character is a girl who has to disguise herself as a boy to become a knight.
- Setting is a medieval world with many different cultures, lots of politics, and magic.
Objective
- Character wants to be the first ever woman knight, which requires a lot of secrecy.
- She wants to both get her shield and to get away from the expectations of her as a girl.
Confrontation
- She must live with all males in tight quarters.
- She faces execution if she fails.
- She also must protect the prince, who knows her secret.
Knock-out Ending
- Ends with a huge battle between forces which have been conspiring since the first book, where all loose ends are tied up and she ends up with pretty much everything she wanted out of life, though with some losses.
Spices
- A secret
- Diverse characters that both deny and cater to stereotypes
- Diverse and real relationships that have problems and don’t always end perfectly
- An exciting setting
- An important message
- Action as well as more thoughtful parts
- Lots of good hour that doesn’t take away from the serious parts
- The unique world has multiple cultures and religions which the main character interacts with
Harry Potter series by J.K. Rowling
Lead
- Main Character is an orphan wizard with magical powers more magical than normal wizards who defeated an evil wizard when he was a baby.
- Setting is Hogwarts, a magical castle-school full of wizards.
Objective
- To survive the constant attacks of Voldemort also stop dead wizard Hitler.
- Pass wizard exams.
Confrontation
- He encounters many different obstacles including an entire half of a war force gunning against him. Basically people either want him dead or glorify him into the poster child of good. He later has a prophecy that says he cannot live while Voldemort survives, and can be the only one to kill Voldemort.
Knock-out Ending
- He defeats Voldemort and restores balance and rightness to the wizard world.
Spices
- Setting includes a secret world hidden within our own
- Almost all characters have interesting and sympathetic back stories, no one is truly pure evil
- Explores the full extent of the hard choices and damages of war
- Descriptions of setting are rich and colourful
- Engaging voice

- Even though it is a children's book it explores deep themes like corruption in the establishment

Describing a Setting Through a Character

Broken glass crunched under Ronald’s shoes  as he walked down Downing street. He hurriedly reached down and brushed the off with quick sweeps of his leather-gloved hand. These were Armani, goddamnit. They could not get scratched.
His old street had changed a lot since he had been there. Or maybe he just remembered it differently. The swing set didn’t used to be that decrepit, did it? Ronald shuddered to think of any child playing on something that dangerous, especially not himself.

He had gotten close enough to the building now that he could run his hand across the sign at the front door. THE CANDOR HOUSE FOR BOYS had become TH  CAN OR  OUSE FO  OYS at some point in time. Ronald wished he could have been here to rearrange the letters when they fell off.

Thursday, December 18, 2014

Dealings with the Devil

Alonzo watched from his desk by the window as the young women stepped out of a red Ferrari across the street. Her lipstick matched her car, a bright and shiny red lacquer that demanded attention. She walked towards the doors of the police station.
His interest was piqued. He watched as she entered the reception office, separated from the detective’s desks by a glass wall. She strode to the front desk and spoke to Maria, the receptionist, standing with her hands behind her back like a soldier at ease. Despite her violent lips, she was dressed entirely in dark, muted shades - long black pants, black boots, and a leather jacket far too warm for the bright Sicilian day.
Alonzo had to chuckle when Maria’s lips tightened, and she jabbed a finger at a chair behind the girl. Maria had no time or patience for the rich. She had been supporting herself and her four children since the Mafia had killed her husband.
The Mafia was a serious problem in the city - one that, unfortunately, had the police forces’ hands tied. They could not find a single informant who didn’t disappear in the night, no matter how well-guarded or secret the safe house was made. DNA testing had failed them too, with even the lower-ranked “soldiers” taking precautions against leaving fingerprints, hairs, and blood, committing perfect crimes every night. Alonzo hated those American CIA shows - they gave away all the secrets.
The entire police force had been working overtime trying to get to the Mafia, but the best they could ever get was a soldier or two in the slammer. And even then, the kid was out in little more than a day, his bail paid by some “distant relative”.
Alonzo bent his head back over his most recent report, pushing distraction out of his mind.

It was only after lunch that Alonzo’s thought’s returned to the girl. She was still sitting rigidly in the plastic chair in the reception area, staring into space. Alonzo put down his pen and walked to Maria’s desk.
“That girl came in hours ago,” Alonzo said quietly. “Why is she still here?”
Maria scoffed. “Girl indeed! She’s only eighteen. She came in here and demanded to speak to a high-ranking officer. When I told her she was insane, she just said she would wait. Pah!” Maria went back to typing, having expended the energy she could spare for the youth sitting in the corner. “Probably a prank. Rich kids go around thinking hardworking folk like us got the time to amuse ‘em.”
Alonzo glanced back at the girl. No wealthy child would try to alleviate their boredom by sitting in an uncomfortable chair at a police station all day, especially one who had a Ferrari. 
“Would she talk to me? I could just take her statement and toss it if it’s garbage.”
Maria’s eyes did not leave the dusty computer screen “Be my guest,” she said. “Just as long as she isn’t wasting my time.”
“Beautiful, Maria,” Alonzo said absently, and approached the girl in the corner. 
She only snapped out of her reverie when he was within a meter of her chair. Her hair was coming out of her strict bun in frizzy, curly chunks that hung around her face like limp spaghetti noodles.
She squinted up at him. “Are you the captain?” she asked.
Alonzo smiled, thinking of his pipe dream. “No, I’m a detective.”
Her eyes unfocused again, and returned to a dusty corner of the room. “I refuse to speak to anyone except the captain or someone of equal status.”
Alonzo could see why Maria had lost her patience so quickly. 
“Unfortunately, kid,” he saidI believe I am the only one here who is going to talk to you. So we can either go chat about what’s on your mind, or you can have your butt fall off when it goes numb from that chair.” 
Red lips slim and sharp as a paper cut, the girl nodded and stood up. Alonzo began walking to the interrogation rooms, and she followed at a brisk pace behind him.

The interrogation rooms were dark, with the cheap lightbulbs casting barely enough light to read by. White walls had turned an ambiguous grey. The table was covered in dirt and greasy finger prints, but at least the two broken-down chairs were cushioned.
Alonzo had been sitting quietly with the girl for a few minutes now. He expected she would out with it when they sat down, but she just stared at him, waiting. Finally, he broke.
“Name?” Alonzo asked.
“Angela Columbera,” she responded promptly.
Alonzo leaned forwards across the desk. “And what can I do for you today, Miss Columbera?”
Angela settled her hands on the table, and began rubbing her thumbs together. 
“How can I be sure you’ll use this information appropriately?”
His eyebrows shot into his hairline. They all knew the Mafia must have people in the Police force, even the captain had acknowledged that, but Alonzo was still affronted by such an accusation. “You think I’m a plant, lady? A sell out to the cause?”
She just raised her own brows.
Alonzo rubbed his jaw. “Fine, I don’t blame you. But frankly, nothing I could say would convince you I’m not a plant. You’re gonna have to take a leap of faith. But,” he gestured to the ceiling. “One thing we do keep running around here are the security cams. They’re reviewed after every interrogation. Captain won’t tolerate any cops losing it and beating up some poor witness for information.”
Alonzo expected the girl to look either disturbed or comforted by this, but there was no change in her expression. She did, however, begin nodding, fluffy tendrils bouncing around her face. Then she reached into her leather jacket. 
Alonzo’s hand twitched towards his gun, but there was no need. The girl had begun pulling plastic bags, not weapons, out of her pocket. As she laid them out one by one on the dirty table, he could see the contents through the clear plastic - there was a used cigar, a few shiny CDs, and a gun, but she removed it from her coat so gingerly that Alonzo knew there was no danger. 
For a moment both the cop and the witness stared at the mess of objects on the table. Angela took a deep breath.
“These belong to Dante Abandonato,” she said. Alonzo immediately recognized the name. Abandonato was suspected to be the Don, but the force had no evidence they could use against him in court. She pointed to the cigar. “He smoked this, so it should have some spit on it, for DNA.” 
Alonzo reached for the CD. “What’s on these?”
“I’ve recorded his conversations,” she said quietly. “As many as I could, over the past couple months. I pretend I’m listening to music, but I’m really recording with my phone. I’ve got him saying some… incriminating things.”
Alonzo’s eyes widened. “Are you saying you have evidence he’s Mafia?”
She nodded.
Alonzo looked down at the gun sitting on the table. “And that’s…”
“It’s not his real gun,” she said. “But he uses it a lot to threaten people, so I thought you could use it for prints.”
Alonzo picked it up off the table. “If it’s not real, what does it do?”
“It shoots marshmallows,” Angela said, looking away, biting her lower lip. “He just likes to scare people, then see their faces when they realize they were hit with candy.”
Alonzo was speechless. Even if it wasn’t much, it was more than the department had gotten in months.
Angela had started rubbing her thumbs faster and faster. “Well,” she said. “That’s all I have. So… if you’ll excuse me,”
She stood up abruptly, and walked out of the unlocked interrogation room. Alonzo got up and followed her out the door, only catching up with her in the reception area. Maria was watching her leave, a satisfied look on her face.
“Wait!”
The girl turned in a perfect about-face.
Alonzo gestured helplessly. Nothing about this made sense.“…Why?”
The girl’s blood red lips cracked into their first smile. “Because,” she said. “Dante is one shitty stepfather.”

She pushed open the glass doors and walked out into the street, hips swaying like she could finally move freely. She got into her vivid car and sped away in the opposite direction she had come, leaving Alonzo and Maria to stare at where the crimson vehicle had been.

Tuesday, December 16, 2014

Mismatched Poem - Growing Old

I… Must… Rebuild
The altar of crude reality
Leadership and scholarship
Inspiration and recognition
This is not a game
Talk to me
Do you have opinions
Brains got hungry
The more you eat
Do I dare
Sacrifice our imagination
Such people in it
Take care of
Call of duty
In a box
Board by the theatre
A thousand times over
Help
they need
Candles to light the room
Bright colours to balance out the dull
Being the nice guy
Kinder than being

The one person

Thursday, December 11, 2014

Purple Antartica Prompt: Short Story

The pristine white snow reflected the light of the setting sun, bathing the landscape with gentle, vibrant purples. John stood by the window of the cabin with a mug of strong coffee, gazing out over the gracefully bent boughs of the lavender pine trees.
John had traveled far and long to get to his little cabin in the woods. He had abandoned his city life, his expensive suits, even his high profile job in favour of getting back to the basics. 
For so long, John had done nothing but work, work, work; he focused only on his job and the things he could get from it. He never made any lasting friendships, or settled down to have a family. The only thing he had ever wanted was success, until the world around him had shifted.
Out of the corner of his eye, John sensed movement beneath the snow. Feeling safe behind his thick glass window and reinforced walls, he turned with amusement to watch.
He never would have left the city before the catastrophe happened. He was content to focus on his own goals, and those of his company. But when circumstances changed, he was forced to reevaluate his priorities. That was when he used his abundant savings to commission the cabin to be built, sparing no expense, from the solar panels on the roof to the underground self-renewing vegetable garden in the basement.
The figure of a young woman had finally shaken herself free, and staggered up to the window through the thick and debilitating snow. Her snow suit was dirty and ragged, and a ski pole dangled from one decrepit hand. This one must have been a skier.
She gnashed rotting teeth at him, perhaps able to smell his flesh through the window. She still had light pink eyeshadow clinging to her lids, and her one eye was a lovely shade of green. John sipped his coffee, thinking she must have been quite the looker when she was living.

Eventually she ambled away over the mountains, looking for easier prey. John drained his mug and watched the colours of the sky undulate and fade until the sunset changed into northern lights. Yes, it had taken a zombie apocalypse to make him realize what was important in life, but he had come out on top. It was peaceful, being the last man alive.